Week 13: 5. Adonis (5-7) vs. 6. Vulgar (5-3) \\ Adonis wins 4-1

zygote · 05-24-2014, 06:05 AM

Great hook with the crazy character name at the start by Vulgar to draw in, it is followed up by some reference to Lemurians (?). There are some parts that seem unconnected but other phrases which are so unorthodox that they are great. E.g., "An isolationist warmonging peacekeeper" it is nice like an oxymoron or a paradox. It is good the topic is quite ambiguous, only some parts address it directly. It works, but doesn't compare favorably with Adonis more cohesive conceptual effort. Only disliked about Adonis upload's ending, it wasn't set up enough with the previous sections. It could have been much stronger overall with more mention of the family in the beginning. Voting for Adonis.

05-24-2014, 06:05 AM	#1
zygote Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 501 Battle Record: 33-12 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Art of Writing League (3x) Rep Power: 737828	Great hook with the crazy character name at the start by Vulgar to draw in, it is followed up by some reference to Lemurians (?). There are some parts that seem unconnected but other phrases which are so unorthodox that they are great. E.g., "An isolationist warmonging peacekeeper" it is nice like an oxymoron or a paradox. It is good the topic is quite ambiguous, only some parts address it directly. It works, but doesn't compare favorably with Adonis more cohesive conceptual effort. Only disliked about Adonis upload's ending, it wasn't set up enough with the previous sections. It could have been much stronger overall with more mention of the family in the beginning. Voting for Adonis.