Week 12: 7. Johnathan Mercy (2-2) vs. 8. Soulstice (1-2) \\ Johnathan Mercy wins 6-2

Vulgar · 05-18-2014, 10:19 PM

Jonathan Mercy - The writing in this was outstanding, very on point. What I took from this is that the divine feminine, while she fills our voids and we love her psychological company that makes us feel warm and woozy, she is also responsible for multiple wars and chaotic doctrines through our intense dependence on her presence. We withdraw from women like a drug, since ancient civilization to now. Her effect is curious, intoxicating, and sometimes devastating to the city of souls.

Soulstice - lol, I feel like I just heard the Good, the Bad and the Ugly music come on at the end of the second read. You handled your approach very skillfully and delicately. The diction was pinpoint in some areas while the rhyming suffered in some areas, i.e. the dolphin part felt out of place. The tale of an ex-smuggler stirring up the bees for personal nostalgia, a strange exploitation of young motolovs, was a good one in response to the topic.

Jonathan Mercy gets my vote. I liked his verse a little more but this was a close match!

05-18-2014, 10:19 PM	#1
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Jonathan Mercy - The writing in this was outstanding, very on point. What I took from this is that the divine feminine, while she fills our voids and we love her psychological company that makes us feel warm and woozy, she is also responsible for multiple wars and chaotic doctrines through our intense dependence on her presence. We withdraw from women like a drug, since ancient civilization to now. Her effect is curious, intoxicating, and sometimes devastating to the city of souls. Soulstice - lol, I feel like I just heard the Good, the Bad and the Ugly music come on at the end of the second read. You handled your approach very skillfully and delicately. The diction was pinpoint in some areas while the rhyming suffered in some areas, i.e. the dolphin part felt out of place. The tale of an ex-smuggler stirring up the bees for personal nostalgia, a strange exploitation of young motolovs, was a good one in response to the topic. Jonathan Mercy gets my vote. I liked his verse a little more but this was a close match!