Week 11 contender match: 3. timeless (6-4) vs. 4. Split Eight (2-2) \\ Split Eight wins 6-0

Soulstice · 05-11-2014, 11:27 PM

Split - Kind of sudden, sort of a generic ending, although his last thoughts, something unfinished, could be related back to art. I wish you had made that a running metaphor, it would've been tight. Overall, the flow was really good and I liked how you finished schemes in the next line, its complex. The ending was kind of a let down in its relative simplicity, I liked the piece in the middle when it felt biggest.

Time - wording issues is the main takeaway. IMages and dialogue/development both kind of suffered from odd diction and abnormal language. The actual images and characters that were in there were good but could've been a lot clearer and more full (a byproduct of clear language, redundant to note i guess). Flow was cool, but splits was better in the mechanic regard as welel

v - split

05-11-2014, 11:27 PM	#1
Soulstice native system Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 387 Battle Record: 18-21 Champed - Short-Verse Topical Rep Power: 4453411	Split - Kind of sudden, sort of a generic ending, although his last thoughts, something unfinished, could be related back to art. I wish you had made that a running metaphor, it would've been tight. Overall, the flow was really good and I liked how you finished schemes in the next line, its complex. The ending was kind of a let down in its relative simplicity, I liked the piece in the middle when it felt biggest. Time - wording issues is the main takeaway. IMages and dialogue/development both kind of suffered from odd diction and abnormal language. The actual images and characters that were in there were good but could've been a lot clearer and more full (a byproduct of clear language, redundant to note i guess). Flow was cool, but splits was better in the mechanic regard as welel v - split