Week 11: 15. Vulgar (4-2) vs. 16. oats (8-2) \\ oats wins 5-1

zygote · 05-10-2014, 09:16 PM

This is a pretty marxist understanding of the social superstructure. You go through all these different areas (such as colonization, imperialism, social injustice, multinational corporations, environment) and place them secondary to economics. There was a lot of emphasis placed on establishing this hierarchy and portraying economics as the dominant force. 'Preaching/teaching' tones are always a bit annoying, personally. Perhaps there was a more effective way to do the same thing. Multiple rhyming was good. The ending felt shoehorned in with the sole environment focus. It compares nicely with the lighthearted story. Almost like some sort of surreal joke - an individual with the job to press a button and keep the Earth from dying instantly. I really liked this whole though experiment thing, it was a really interesting dichotomy, with the one small insignificant task and the huge consequences. Loved the physical environment/mental-health wordplay in the ending line too. Voting for Vulgar.

05-10-2014, 09:16 PM	#6
zygote Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 501 Battle Record: 33-12 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Art of Writing League (3x) Rep Power: 737828	This is a pretty marxist understanding of the social superstructure. You go through all these different areas (such as colonization, imperialism, social injustice, multinational corporations, environment) and place them secondary to economics. There was a lot of emphasis placed on establishing this hierarchy and portraying economics as the dominant force. 'Preaching/teaching' tones are always a bit annoying, personally. Perhaps there was a more effective way to do the same thing. Multiple rhyming was good. The ending felt shoehorned in with the sole environment focus. It compares nicely with the lighthearted story. Almost like some sort of surreal joke - an individual with the job to press a button and keep the Earth from dying instantly. I really liked this whole though experiment thing, it was a really interesting dichotomy, with the one small insignificant task and the huge consequences. Loved the physical environment/mental-health wordplay in the ending line too. Voting for Vulgar.