Week 10: 11. illergicreaxion (0-0) vs. 12. Frank (6-3) \\ Frank wins 5-1

Perpendicular · 05-02-2014, 09:59 PM

Illergicreaxion: I have some issues with this verse. The characters that you created, because they were glimpses of characters, were very irrelevant to me as the reader. I understood that coming into the second or third stanza, so I expected a big finish. I never got a big finish. I got what I had already assumed this verse was about from the beginning. There were a lot of shining moments: little glitz’ of strong verse ideas that were crushed by the shortness of their surrounding atmosphere.
Frank: Clitoris nub. Lol.This was a pain to read. The flow of the story was almost tedious to follow and the broken scheme was annoying. The story “overdid” the topic because I think it far exceeds the phrase “certain degree,” but it is still valid and a more rounded story than your opponents.
Vote: Frank

05-02-2014, 09:59 PM	#4
Perpendicular Running Right Through You Join Date: Apr 2014 Posts: 31 Battle Record: 1-3 Rep Power: 9650	Illergicreaxion: I have some issues with this verse. The characters that you created, because they were glimpses of characters, were very irrelevant to me as the reader. I understood that coming into the second or third stanza, so I expected a big finish. I never got a big finish. I got what I had already assumed this verse was about from the beginning. There were a lot of shining moments: little glitz’ of strong verse ideas that were crushed by the shortness of their surrounding atmosphere. Frank: Clitoris nub. Lol.This was a pain to read. The flow of the story was almost tedious to follow and the broken scheme was annoying. The story “overdid” the topic because I think it far exceeds the phrase “certain degree,” but it is still valid and a more rounded story than your opponents. Vote: Frank