Week 10: 7. Vulgar (4-1) vs. 8. Split Eight (1-2) \\ Split Eight wins 4-3

Perpendicular · 05-02-2014, 09:46 PM

Split Eight: interesting take on the topic. The wording is what makes your verses unique. “the resume of every night’s trends” “minutia of men” were interesting word choices that popped. You really encapsulated the characters. The interesting thing is how much personality you gave to the narrator just by the way he described her. Strong work, with a very natural flow.
Vulgar: Classic storytelling. Very clean writing. Concise, to the point, nothing extraneous. Couple of things rubbed me the wrong way that are personal taboos, but nothing major. I’ve always thought that writing natural-sounding dialogue for more than a line or two is one of the hardest things to do in this medium after actually being funny. You both (basically) had character pieces and I feel split had better characterization
Vote: Split eight

05-02-2014, 09:46 PM	#4
Perpendicular Running Right Through You Join Date: Apr 2014 Posts: 31 Battle Record: 1-3 Rep Power: 9650	Split Eight: interesting take on the topic. The wording is what makes your verses unique. “the resume of every night’s trends” “minutia of men” were interesting word choices that popped. You really encapsulated the characters. The interesting thing is how much personality you gave to the narrator just by the way he described her. Strong work, with a very natural flow. Vulgar: Classic storytelling. Very clean writing. Concise, to the point, nothing extraneous. Couple of things rubbed me the wrong way that are personal taboos, but nothing major. I’ve always thought that writing natural-sounding dialogue for more than a line or two is one of the hardest things to do in this medium after actually being funny. You both (basically) had character pieces and I feel split had better characterization Vote: Split eight