Week 9: 13. Certain (1-1) vs. 14. timeless (4-4) \\ timeless wins 5-3

Perpendicular · 04-27-2014, 12:16 AM

Timeless: the seldom bliss/hell a kiss/know we’re fucked/ode to luck bit was my favorite part. This started real strong and forceful and wound out with a good point. The allegory in the middle really tied it all together. Dope verse.
Certain: Great characterization and great spread of characters. I think the verse lacked a strong connection between the characters and the universe, and I look for that in a verse. Also, feel like you spent more time characterizing the first character than the others, which is a shame. The thing that’s holding this verse back the most is that it was encapsulating but not engaging enough.
Vote: Timeless

04-27-2014, 12:16 AM	#8
Perpendicular Running Right Through You Join Date: Apr 2014 Posts: 31 Battle Record: 1-3 Rep Power: 9650	Timeless: the seldom bliss/hell a kiss/know we’re fucked/ode to luck bit was my favorite part. This started real strong and forceful and wound out with a good point. The allegory in the middle really tied it all together. Dope verse. Certain: Great characterization and great spread of characters. I think the verse lacked a strong connection between the characters and the universe, and I look for that in a verse. Also, feel like you spent more time characterizing the first character than the others, which is a shame. The thing that’s holding this verse back the most is that it was encapsulating but not engaging enough. Vote: Timeless