Week 8: 17. d0ubt (0-0) vs. 18. Johnathan Mercy (0-0) \\ Johnathan Mercy wins 5-1

[Zombie]

Ugh. Both are so good! Both styles I can pinpoint very vaguely. I'd rather not.

Johnathan started with a an insight to his imagery with a slew of syllables. I thought it was impressive. Until I read the second part and was a bit MORE impressed. This piece radiated throughout the most.

And being a frozen phantom requiring love
My magnum opus is an unfocused tantrum
- Low on hugs but I have dope and handguns
The concrete itself holds me ransom
- Forming an onus-mantled, ferocious dragon

Frozen phantom. Absolutely was the beginning to this onslaught of imagery welded with long winded word display.
My very complaint is that it seem very short, as soon as it started is as soon as it finished. Which threw me off, in the non traditional sense of things. I hoped for more, but maybe less is more. Looking back at it a long winded slew of this stuff here would just probably put me off, as the wording was top-notch. Phrasing a more complete story-line for the sake of arching theoretical heuristics would've done this piece more justice than it already has show. You seemed more streamlined. Gorgeous.

d0ubt was absolutely SOLID here. As a repeating schematic of your opponent, your mid-section was that of a pregnant woman. Disgusting, yet beautiful. I think you almost tried to mimic a variety of your opponents syllable laden apologue. Very preciously written

bare in mind, the rare sight when these worlds dare collide
like kinder egg surprise when milk over layers the white
they exist in parallel so never intersect
the moon was a small feat but this gap's a bigger step
such a height differential but no where to climb
'cause we're freezing, trying to reach ninety fehrenheit
white collars and no collar, but not many blue
around here there's a shortage of jobs to pursue
once in a blue moon, mercury begins to rise
and someone sparkles like a star seen in the skies
gifted with a ticket to get lifted up high

Intense. The segment before that just as intense. You misspelled results. But that was probably just a slip, idk what restults are. This was just as good, in its own way, a longer , yet still simplistic notorietic approach to a near malleable impression of genetically modified doppelgangers. You guys are alias's of better known writers, and I think it's actually pretty funny that you guys are duking it out on unknown barriers! Who knows? Maybe you're the same.


Also @Johnathan Mercy

I sigh and begrudge, life in this tiring sludge
- Occasionally firing up on a diet of drugs

Very nice, probably my favorite line. The whole renaissance to this verse was exceptional. The curative efforts to adapt morose scenery and adroitness to compel the reader with psychological ties was clever.

Intense/Extremely close. d0ubt turned me off with simple lines like "stars in the skies" Though they create a clever and ongoing filler, but create a monotone happiness level as far as the reader getting into it. Based off this alone my vote goes to Johnathan Mercy. Just really wished they would have went a bit longer, as I was mildly turned off by the brevity.