Week 7: Certain (0-0) vs. rhetoric (0-0) \\ Certain wins 5-3

e11even · 04-14-2014, 02:42 AM

Rhetoric- this was a good verse. The story ending was an expected twist for me, but your solid execution made it a worthwhile read. Your rhymes were very consistent but standard-ish and just seemed to carry the verse along, which isn't a bad thing, since this piece was in a story format. Overall good job.

Certain- language and execution was cool. I was looking for either more detail or more of an abstract idea. But this, as it was, remained in the middle between the two extreme angle styles. I feel like there was something missing that would otherwise make this more entrancing and enjoyable, but it kinda fell flat. I was hoping for more animal farm tbh. Good effort overall though.

I felt like both verses could have gone differently, but both had a very solid presentation and sturdy rhyming, Certain having considerably more of the latter. For me, this is a battle for interest and I find a good arc more important than well- placed language in more cases. MVGT rhetoric for more enjoyable verse overall.

04-14-2014, 02:42 AM	#11
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	Rhetoric- this was a good verse. The story ending was an expected twist for me, but your solid execution made it a worthwhile read. Your rhymes were very consistent but standard-ish and just seemed to carry the verse along, which isn't a bad thing, since this piece was in a story format. Overall good job. Certain- language and execution was cool. I was looking for either more detail or more of an abstract idea. But this, as it was, remained in the middle between the two extreme angle styles. I feel like there was something missing that would otherwise make this more entrancing and enjoyable, but it kinda fell flat. I was hoping for more animal farm tbh. Good effort overall though. I felt like both verses could have gone differently, but both had a very solid presentation and sturdy rhyming, Certain having considerably more of the latter. For me, this is a battle for interest and I find a good arc more important than well- placed language in more cases. MVGT rhetoric for more enjoyable verse overall. __________________ Ahem.