Week 7 contender match: Frank (5-1) vs. King Ra. (3-3) \\ King Ra. wins via disqualification

Three-Planes-Aligned · 04-13-2014, 02:37 PM

Frank - "just life in the prison" fluff-worded stuff like <that I read in Borat's voice for whatever (the) reason. There were other instances of blemished wording (combust is a verb under all circumstances) - though the negative nancy part of my breakdown ends right when I compliment your overall high level of wording... here. So there. Cool read, I enjoyed it.

King Ra - Again, wording (cowardice grudge?) - this piece, and you as the author of it, was more effective at painting something vivid using simpler forms of natural-sounding Ingles. Your narrative was a bit of a head-on collision with a distinct mythological flavor. I enjoyed this one as well.

Overall I'll give King Ra the nod for the narrative progress accomplished with the savages/practices/etc.-scheme

04-13-2014, 02:37 PM	#5
Three-Planes-Aligned Hyphenated Join Date: Apr 2014 Location: The Black Lodge Posts: 79 Battle Record: 7-8 Rep Power: 549512	Frank - "just life in the prison" fluff-worded stuff like <that I read in Borat's voice for whatever (the) reason. There were other instances of blemished wording (combust is a verb under all circumstances) - though the negative nancy part of my breakdown ends right when I compliment your overall high level of wording... here. So there. Cool read, I enjoyed it. King Ra - Again, wording (cowardice grudge?) - this piece, and you as the author of it, was more effective at painting something vivid using simpler forms of natural-sounding Ingles. Your narrative was a bit of a head-on collision with a distinct mythological flavor. I enjoyed this one as well. Overall I'll give King Ra the nod for the narrative progress accomplished with the savages/practices/etc.-scheme