Week 7: Brian Bryan (0-0) vs. MMLP (0-0) \\ Brian Bryan wins 7-0

e11even · 04-11-2014, 04:34 AM

BBryan- This setup was dope. I fell for the telegraph and hadn't predicted the twist. This was crisp with fow and wording and careful on description. For such a fast drop it still delivered adequately and concisely. Good shit.

MMLP- I think more could have been done here. I feel like the this was too linear from the very start. your execution was ok, if not for the rhyming and cadence missteps, and the story could have been a little more gripping with more impactful use of the space you used. You kept it together for the most part, but when given the chance, a second lookover could possibly have spotted some of the problems. Good effort though.

Overall, good job guys. Thank you for saving the league this week and being the first match open for votes- that was very stellar of you both. MVGT BBryan for the more complete and better-written drop. Thank you guys again :)

04-11-2014, 04:34 AM	#7
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	BBryan- This setup was dope. I fell for the telegraph and hadn't predicted the twist. This was crisp with fow and wording and careful on description. For such a fast drop it still delivered adequately and concisely. Good shit. MMLP- I think more could have been done here. I feel like the this was too linear from the very start. your execution was ok, if not for the rhyming and cadence missteps, and the story could have been a little more gripping with more impactful use of the space you used. You kept it together for the most part, but when given the chance, a second lookover could possibly have spotted some of the problems. Good effort though. Overall, good job guys. Thank you for saving the league this week and being the first match open for votes- that was very stellar of you both. MVGT BBryan for the more complete and better-written drop. Thank you guys again :) __________________ Ahem.