AOWL Week 5 CHAMPIONSHIP MATCH: Frank (4-0) VS. zygote (3-0) (FRANK WINS 10-4)

Dove Dozer · 03-19-2013, 03:54 PM

this was a great battle to read and examine each writers different style and type of narraration that they add to the story which is the main reason I come here. so I can learn something. very well done.

zygote - I usually have trouble with verses like this. A lot of vocab in here "nucleotide sequence". I didn't even know what that meant lol. but either way you had some nice multies in here and some exceptional imagery. So many words I wouldn't think of using in your piece so I really appreciate your vocab on this. Which is one major thing I gotta elevate with so I deeply enjoyed that with your verse. it came together nicely too. I like the topic and dehumanizing us as people is a creepy thought. Well above anything I could write so props on a dope verse. Man this was ill.

Frank - This was a perfect example of your champ title. Story had a lot to it. multies, internals, and layers of metaphors that really prompted me to re-read lines as I progressed. like I couldn't tell sometimes wether you were human or a whale. pretty damn good story at that. I have no real critique on this, because simply put this was amazing. well done.

great match both writers came dope as fuck. very clever verses however I'll go with the more entertaining piece here. That said.

Vote - Frank.

03-19-2013, 03:54 PM	#16
Dove Dozer loose leaf bruce lee Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,077 Battle Record: 7-6 Rep Power: 1853216	this was a great battle to read and examine each writers different style and type of narraration that they add to the story which is the main reason I come here. so I can learn something. very well done. zygote - I usually have trouble with verses like this. A lot of vocab in here "nucleotide sequence". I didn't even know what that meant lol. but either way you had some nice multies in here and some exceptional imagery. So many words I wouldn't think of using in your piece so I really appreciate your vocab on this. Which is one major thing I gotta elevate with so I deeply enjoyed that with your verse. it came together nicely too. I like the topic and dehumanizing us as people is a creepy thought. Well above anything I could write so props on a dope verse. Man this was ill. Frank - This was a perfect example of your champ title. Story had a lot to it. multies, internals, and layers of metaphors that really prompted me to re-read lines as I progressed. like I couldn't tell sometimes wether you were human or a whale. pretty damn good story at that. I have no real critique on this, because simply put this was amazing. well done. great match both writers came dope as fuck. very clever verses however I'll go with the more entertaining piece here. That said. Vote - Frank. __________________