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Old 03-19-2013, 12:10 PM   #10
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Hmmmm...

It’s dope for what it is, thought you carried on the opening multi-string too far, maybe? I’ve done if myself in the past so I appreciate exactly why you would do that, I guess that as my style’s evolved or matured I’ve just learned it’s better to loosen up the strings on things like that. Less is more, almost. You dig? It just gives the writing a more natural feel when it’s not as strict a discipline being applied. There’s a lot to like in this, undoubtably one of my fav. writers around here of recent times, and I don’t doubt a lot of the lines already quoted will be so again.

Good to see you still writing, bro.

Keep that pen moving!
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