Group Therapy Session (ft. Neighbor and Vulgar)

dead man · 04-06-2014, 06:32 PM

Degree in chemistry; mix hydrocloric brews; Agent Orange and Blue
Watching Neigh Palm weapons big enough to turn the whole Vietnam forest floor a fluorescent hue

nice. this kind of line is where the battle arena and om intersect on the same wavelength. good to see you back at in kin.

i think the term in is welcome was probably one of your lesser segments in this verse. but that just personal preference. the bar that big baby quoted was something fierce though. almost like you broke out for a second and touched the water. explore that more imo. you peppered this with punchlines for the most part and some were more effective than others but you are still finding a new voice after the time has passed its understandable...

neigh

Somalian pirate in the wake of Poseidon, my optical fibers like an Oculus visor

zoinks.

My genes're sinister.. DNA print reads as genius literature w/ Nietzsche's signature

another knockout. you have the tendency to coast for a few lines and then hit us with great concepts like this. like a well timed epiphany. this is why your style is so JMT. because thats how paz be most of the time..

you could improve the consistency of those if you stopped falling back on old writing habits and explored something new. its something I'm working on too..

vulgar

it was fun reading you write in a more contrived traditional "swagnflow" type of way i guess id call it. it didnt really suit you stylistically in my opinion. i kept wanting you to veer away from this and while i find it hypocritical that i just criticized neighbor for not experimenting with unfamiliar tools i think your more automatic approach would have suited this collaboration better. you still had some standouts

If Kano's kissing your empress, each page is visual leverage
RESPECT my team. We ain't your average Aretha Franklin nipple suppressors
We came to give you a lesson, a statement issued to enrich or triple investments
Overhaulin' with no balls - couldn't even scrape the Michelin's melon

The cinderblocks in my palms had Liston droppin' his jaws

A fuckin' beast when I'm writing these on eternal scrolls of summer evening ivory

overall this was something really refreshing to see. you guys meshed naturally and successfully showcased your individual and differing skill-sets in the same conditions. respect.

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04-06-2014, 06:32 PM	#14
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	Degree in chemistry; mix hydrocloric brews; Agent Orange and Blue Watching Neigh Palm weapons big enough to turn the whole Vietnam forest floor a fluorescent hue nice. this kind of line is where the battle arena and om intersect on the same wavelength. good to see you back at in kin. i think the term in is welcome was probably one of your lesser segments in this verse. but that just personal preference. the bar that big baby quoted was something fierce though. almost like you broke out for a second and touched the water. explore that more imo. you peppered this with punchlines for the most part and some were more effective than others but you are still finding a new voice after the time has passed its understandable... neigh Somalian pirate in the wake of Poseidon, my optical fibers like an Oculus visor zoinks. My genes're sinister.. DNA print reads as genius literature w/ Nietzsche's signature another knockout. you have the tendency to coast for a few lines and then hit us with great concepts like this. like a well timed epiphany. this is why your style is so JMT. because thats how paz be most of the time.. you could improve the consistency of those if you stopped falling back on old writing habits and explored something new. its something I'm working on too.. vulgar it was fun reading you write in a more contrived traditional "swagnflow" type of way i guess id call it. it didnt really suit you stylistically in my opinion. i kept wanting you to veer away from this and while i find it hypocritical that i just criticized neighbor for not experimenting with unfamiliar tools i think your more automatic approach would have suited this collaboration better. you still had some standouts If Kano's kissing your empress, each page is visual leverage RESPECT my team. We ain't your average Aretha Franklin nipple suppressors We came to give you a lesson, a statement issued to enrich or triple investments Overhaulin' with no balls - couldn't even scrape the Michelin's melon The cinderblocks in my palms had Liston droppin' his jaws A fuckin' beast when I'm writing these on eternal scrolls of summer evening ivory overall this was something really refreshing to see. you guys meshed naturally and successfully showcased your individual and differing skill-sets in the same conditions. respect. 1 __________________ Zack Wicks for president