Week 5: Adonis (2-2) vs. King Ra. (2-2) \\ Adonis wins 6-0

timeless · 03-30-2014, 12:52 PM

Adonis, this is probably my favorite piece that I’ve read from you so far this season. The approach you decided to take was pretty vague, nothing too original or crafty about it. Everything else about it seemed pretty much on point, besides the ending, I felt you could’ve crafted that a little better. Wish it was longer as well, but whatever, not a bad read.

King, just like Adonis, this was probably my favorite piece that I’ve read from you so far. I enjoyed the comedic type of approach you took. The only real reason I’m leaning on voting for Adonis is because of your last verse, if it was structured differently or left a better overall impact on me, you would’ve had this hands down. Not bad though.

v.Adonis

03-30-2014, 12:52 PM	#8
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	Adonis, this is probably my favorite piece that I’ve read from you so far this season. The approach you decided to take was pretty vague, nothing too original or crafty about it. Everything else about it seemed pretty much on point, besides the ending, I felt you could’ve crafted that a little better. Wish it was longer as well, but whatever, not a bad read. King, just like Adonis, this was probably my favorite piece that I’ve read from you so far. I enjoyed the comedic type of approach you took. The only real reason I’m leaning on voting for Adonis is because of your last verse, if it was structured differently or left a better overall impact on me, you would’ve had this hands down. Not bad though. v.Adonis