"The Pick Up Basketball Game of Death"

CopyPat · 03-29-2014, 03:47 PM

haha whatsup man

this was a little different for you, it was pretty cool for the most part. def read smooth and u finally didn't incorporate obscure vocab and references, which made for a much more enjoyable read. overall the story was weird lol. Yehuda?? jewish guy or asian?

and LOL at the other names: Nate, Rob, Nigel and Ben Michael & Tim. so its a bunch of white Englishmen playing a game of pickup street basketball?? and then one maybe black guy Keyon , probly a fakeblack like cakes, a blackfakebrah. @ halfcake brah to thread to verify if these things actually happen. shit made me laugh. i wasn't expecting the ending either. assassin recruiting students, way outta left field. pretty original i guess. but i don't get why he needlessly just murdered all those poor innocent helpless ninny's first for no reason? haha

overall i thought the rhyming was good. the story was interesting and this was a good break from what u normally do so i liked it. i also found it pretty funny (maybe for different reasons) which i think was what u were kinda going for. it obviously wasn't supposed to be serious so yeah, was cool to see u do.

03-29-2014, 03:47 PM	#3
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	haha whatsup man this was a little different for you, it was pretty cool for the most part. def read smooth and u finally didn't incorporate obscure vocab and references, which made for a much more enjoyable read. overall the story was weird lol. Yehuda?? jewish guy or asian? and LOL at the other names: Nate, Rob, Nigel and Ben Michael & Tim. so its a bunch of white Englishmen playing a game of pickup street basketball?? and then one maybe black guy Keyon , probly a fakeblack like cakes, a blackfakebrah. @ halfcake brah to thread to verify if these things actually happen. shit made me laugh. i wasn't expecting the ending either. assassin recruiting students, way outta left field. pretty original i guess. but i don't get why he needlessly just murdered all those poor innocent helpless ninny's first for no reason? haha overall i thought the rhyming was good. the story was interesting and this was a good break from what u normally do so i liked it. i also found it pretty funny (maybe for different reasons) which i think was what u were kinda going for. it obviously wasn't supposed to be serious so yeah, was cool to see u do. __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.