Week 5: Adonis (2-2) vs. King Ra. (2-2) \\ Adonis wins 6-0

NYCSPITZ · 03-29-2014, 12:25 PM

yooo this was mad dope!

Adonis your phrasing was excellent and added a bit of ethereality/indigo child/coming of a new age type swag to it. I thought your wording was dope, succinct and laconic. AIMZ this shit was fire homie!!! From the wording, to the structure, you have a great way of creating an epic feeling to your verses. The tension and suspense you created by introducing the freak of nature was excellent, as well as the "push" device you used to build up to mother nature birthing something that is seemingly going to destroy her. The only problem I have here is that it was so dope that I was very very interested in the freak of nature, then you just birth the child of nature without describing it. Man I was like wtf yo I wanted to see this epic nigga in all his glory! So both came dope, but despite the credentials of both contestants one had a more complete verse

mvgt Adonis

03-29-2014, 12:25 PM	#5
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,031 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743547	yooo this was mad dope! Adonis your phrasing was excellent and added a bit of ethereality/indigo child/coming of a new age type swag to it. I thought your wording was dope, succinct and laconic. AIMZ this shit was fire homie!!! From the wording, to the structure, you have a great way of creating an epic feeling to your verses. The tension and suspense you created by introducing the freak of nature was excellent, as well as the "push" device you used to build up to mother nature birthing something that is seemingly going to destroy her. The only problem I have here is that it was so dope that I was very very interested in the freak of nature, then you just birth the child of nature without describing it. Man I was like wtf yo I wanted to see this epic nigga in all his glory! So both came dope, but despite the credentials of both contestants one had a more complete verse mvgt Adonis __________________ UNIFIED THEORY