Black holes are where God divided by zero

namix · 03-18-2013, 05:08 PM

dug this topic dude! loved the idea of "black holes = where god divided by zero".

overall smart subject matter, and solid execution. You have the ingredients to make a helluva meal bro - try to utilize what you know about life the way you have, except bring the audience there from a different direction. most people who have 'creative problems' tend to not be able to think of their 'end point' -- you have A LOT of depth to pull from here, and within your end point of this topic, you could 'subdivide' infinite end-points, so subject matter is not an issue. connect to your audience in a unique way -- use 'that other dimension' to bring them to the end point you are trying to reveal.

that unique spin will make it that much more meaningful - use allusion, let their mind conclude what you are trying to showcase... and do it through an overarching theme with more allusion/metaphor sprinkled throughout. there are salient points in here but at times it can kind of come off fact-of-the-matter'ish (and thats to those who understand) -- a test for these kinds of topics is to try to make it speak in a language where even those who DONT "get it" would appreciate it too.... i remember a stage i was in of writing like this bro - and dont take that the wrong way, because it wasnt that long ago either and i'm a solid writer - but i tried to be real straight forward with a complex truth, and there is a way you can do it both real and real creative...

this may sound like deep feedback, but based on some of the subject matter you're alluding to, buut if that doesn't make any sense, just let me know and i'm happy to clarify bro.

good stuff.

03-18-2013, 05:08 PM	#1
namix been that, done there. Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 2,259 Battle Record: 2-1 Accomplishments - OM HOF Rep Power: 85246655	dug this topic dude! loved the idea of "black holes = where god divided by zero". overall smart subject matter, and solid execution. You have the ingredients to make a helluva meal bro - try to utilize what you know about life the way you have, except bring the audience there from a different direction. most people who have 'creative problems' tend to not be able to think of their 'end point' -- you have A LOT of depth to pull from here, and within your end point of this topic, you could 'subdivide' infinite end-points, so subject matter is not an issue. connect to your audience in a unique way -- use 'that other dimension' to bring them to the end point you are trying to reveal. that unique spin will make it that much more meaningful - use allusion, let their mind conclude what you are trying to showcase... and do it through an overarching theme with more allusion/metaphor sprinkled throughout. there are salient points in here but at times it can kind of come off fact-of-the-matter'ish (and thats to those who understand) -- a test for these kinds of topics is to try to make it speak in a language where even those who DONT "get it" would appreciate it too.... i remember a stage i was in of writing like this bro - and dont take that the wrong way, because it wasnt that long ago either and i'm a solid writer - but i tried to be real straight forward with a complex truth, and there is a way you can do it both real and real creative... this may sound like deep feedback, but based on some of the subject matter you're alluding to, buut if that doesn't make any sense, just let me know and i'm happy to clarify bro. good stuff.