Week 5: Totoro (0-2) vs. El Pancake (1-1) \\ El Pancake wins 4-2

zygote · 03-29-2014, 05:35 AM

Firstly they seemed similar due to the rare vocabulary used in both, but Pancakebrah wrote with a refined realism while Totoro went absurd (in a good way). Enjoyed the atypical style of PB's descriptions, things like "venn diagram comfort", "echo of the arpeggio." and "fate’s dreadnought." are interesting while still retaining a kind of delicate quality. It meshes well with the existentialist love poem format. "stuff." was an apt title, it at once captures the whole central message of "because nothing does matter. but everything does." while also mirroring the apathetic nature of the writing tone. Totoro's writing was immensely enjoyable, it was a just line after line of ridiculousness. It says a lot that the it began in a rather restrained fashion (compared to the end 'rat monologue') but the first line still made reference to "a sea of nascent souls." It was very ambitious, it ran the gamut of life and death, not just from birth to death, but from conception to burial. There are some great similes, very creative. A few that I managed to pick out; "a heavy shovel crushes him" - burial, "like a satyr entombed" - fetus, there were others too, but the general point, is that there was an interesting way of presenting everything. It was a close decision, voting for PB.

03-29-2014, 05:35 AM	#1
zygote Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 501 Battle Record: 33-12 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Art of Writing League (3x) Rep Power: 737828	Firstly they seemed similar due to the rare vocabulary used in both, but Pancakebrah wrote with a refined realism while Totoro went absurd (in a good way). Enjoyed the atypical style of PB's descriptions, things like "venn diagram comfort", "echo of the arpeggio." and "fate’s dreadnought." are interesting while still retaining a kind of delicate quality. It meshes well with the existentialist love poem format. "stuff." was an apt title, it at once captures the whole central message of "because nothing does matter. but everything does." while also mirroring the apathetic nature of the writing tone. Totoro's writing was immensely enjoyable, it was a just line after line of ridiculousness. It says a lot that the it began in a rather restrained fashion (compared to the end 'rat monologue') but the first line still made reference to "a sea of nascent souls." It was very ambitious, it ran the gamut of life and death, not just from birth to death, but from conception to burial. There are some great similes, very creative. A few that I managed to pick out; "a heavy shovel crushes him" - burial, "like a satyr entombed" - fetus, there were others too, but the general point, is that there was an interesting way of presenting everything. It was a close decision, voting for PB.