AOWL Week 5: Red glare (2-1) VS. Zenland (2-2) OPEN FOR VOTES!!!

Objective · 03-18-2013, 07:07 AM

Zenland: The rhymescheme was rather cluttered. The flow wasn't all that, but the story itself was interesting with the fitting metaphores. A creative approach and regarding to the topic I think you pulled it off. If you had more time on your hands I bet your piece would have been a lot better.

Red Glare: Dope rhymescheme, decent flow and I could follow your story well. Great descriptions of the event and putting a real atmosphere to your piece. It was a bit reptitive at times but I think the approach to the topic itself was cool. For some reason I also feel like you kinda moved away from the topic and just slapped a few lines to the end to make it fit. Either way; I liked the execution and the twist anyways, so it doesn't really matter, just wanted to mention it.

Vote: Red Glare. I felt his piece was better overall. Zenland had a dope thing going, but was hurt by the flow etc. I usually focus more on creativity and how the topic is flipped, but seeing how this was rather close in terms of the final execution I feel forced to focus more on the scheme in order to drop my vote. I enjoyed Zenlands verse better but Red Glare edges it with an overall better piece.

03-18-2013, 07:07 AM	#11
Objective ( ͡º ͜ʖ ͡º) Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,868 Battle Record: 17-32 Rep Power: 52474192	Zenland: The rhymescheme was rather cluttered. The flow wasn't all that, but the story itself was interesting with the fitting metaphores. A creative approach and regarding to the topic I think you pulled it off. If you had more time on your hands I bet your piece would have been a lot better. Red Glare: Dope rhymescheme, decent flow and I could follow your story well. Great descriptions of the event and putting a real atmosphere to your piece. It was a bit reptitive at times but I think the approach to the topic itself was cool. For some reason I also feel like you kinda moved away from the topic and just slapped a few lines to the end to make it fit. Either way; I liked the execution and the twist anyways, so it doesn't really matter, just wanted to mention it. Vote: Red Glare. I felt his piece was better overall. Zenland had a dope thing going, but was hurt by the flow etc. I usually focus more on creativity and how the topic is flipped, but seeing how this was rather close in terms of the final execution I feel forced to focus more on the scheme in order to drop my vote. I enjoyed Zenlands verse better but Red Glare edges it with an overall better piece.