When the Grey Mist Lands

Just Write · 03-25-2014, 06:34 PM

This was cool, almost too many rhymes ahaha. I got stuck in a couple spots. Looked like you were just messin around with some different schemes and shit. Gotta be the first poem ive ever heard talking about flax seed lol. Why dont you sign up for the AWOL league man? I'd love to read your pieces if you participated. Anyways as far as this piece goes it was technically sound with perfect mechanics it was just the story itself that kind of bored me. Usually im all over your stuff though. Keep dropping. If you get a second to peep my latest id appreciate it also. Stay up bro

03-25-2014, 06:34 PM	#5
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997617	This was cool, almost too many rhymes ahaha. I got stuck in a couple spots. Looked like you were just messin around with some different schemes and shit. Gotta be the first poem ive ever heard talking about flax seed lol. Why dont you sign up for the AWOL league man? I'd love to read your pieces if you participated. Anyways as far as this piece goes it was technically sound with perfect mechanics it was just the story itself that kind of bored me. Usually im all over your stuff though. Keep dropping. If you get a second to peep my latest id appreciate it also. Stay up bro __________________