Week 4 contender match: Just Write (3-0) vs. oats (3-0) \\ oats wins 7-1

Mike Wrecka · 03-23-2014, 05:35 PM

dope battle fellas. really two in depth stories here. it was a story battle more than topical almost. you guys both kind of neglected the razzle dazzle technical rhyming in favor of amazing and engaging narratives.

oats - I liked it. it flowed pretty well in most spots. the blue collar and white collar siblings was a cool idea. you pulled it together with the picture in the end. metaphorically. which was cool. It was good. you did great with the character development aspect. really fleshed them out.

jw - this didn't flow nearly as well as your usual stuff. your verses would always sound great on a beat, maybe this would, but I didn't get that tbh. but you did create a really dope story line with a interesting ending. two weeks in a row you really wowed me at the finish of the verse. I really enjoyed the verse. the character you created was interesting.

two pretty much equal verses technically and flow wise. oats gets the slight edge in those departments. but while I did find his verse very well written and thought out, I also found it a tad boring. jw's verse was more a movie id like to watch tbh. I also think he worked in the topic in a much better way. not that oats didn't tie in the topic well, he did, its just that JW did it better.

vote - JustinWrite

03-23-2014, 05:35 PM	#6
Mike Wrecka WOW Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,591 Battle Record: 29-25 Champed - Writing Challenge League I Rep Power: 82779338	dope battle fellas. really two in depth stories here. it was a story battle more than topical almost. you guys both kind of neglected the razzle dazzle technical rhyming in favor of amazing and engaging narratives. oats - I liked it. it flowed pretty well in most spots. the blue collar and white collar siblings was a cool idea. you pulled it together with the picture in the end. metaphorically. which was cool. It was good. you did great with the character development aspect. really fleshed them out. jw - this didn't flow nearly as well as your usual stuff. your verses would always sound great on a beat, maybe this would, but I didn't get that tbh. but you did create a really dope story line with a interesting ending. two weeks in a row you really wowed me at the finish of the verse. I really enjoyed the verse. the character you created was interesting. two pretty much equal verses technically and flow wise. oats gets the slight edge in those departments. but while I did find his verse very well written and thought out, I also found it a tad boring. jw's verse was more a movie id like to watch tbh. I also think he worked in the topic in a much better way. not that oats didn't tie in the topic well, he did, its just that JW did it better. vote - JustinWrite __________________ A.bove T.he R.est