Week 4: King Ra. (1-2) vs. Mr. J (0-1) \\ King Ra. wins 5-0

zygote · 03-22-2014, 05:13 AM

Enjoyed this contest. Mr. J had a good ending with the self-referential quality. The ending had some self-depreciation humor which was executed well. Conversational tone also meshes well with the overall approach. Good train of thought writing, but the rhyming was a little repetitive in places. Contrast it with King Ra's who mixed up the style of writing quite a bit between the different sections. The second half beginning with the dialogue was just great. The characterization was solid without being that great, but the real highlights were the descriptions at the start which really captured the essence of the stimulus and also added to it. Voting for King Ra.

03-22-2014, 05:13 AM	#4
zygote Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 501 Battle Record: 33-12 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Art of Writing League (3x) Rep Power: 737828	Enjoyed this contest. Mr. J had a good ending with the self-referential quality. The ending had some self-depreciation humor which was executed well. Conversational tone also meshes well with the overall approach. Good train of thought writing, but the rhyming was a little repetitive in places. Contrast it with King Ra's who mixed up the style of writing quite a bit between the different sections. The second half beginning with the dialogue was just great. The characterization was solid without being that great, but the real highlights were the descriptions at the start which really captured the essence of the stimulus and also added to it. Voting for King Ra.