Week 4 contender match: Just Write (3-0) vs. oats (3-0) \\ oats wins 7-1

oats · 03-21-2014, 11:42 PM

Suburban Timebomb
OR
The True Story of the Erosion of the Middle Class 4 Kidz!

Once upon a time there was a family of suburban achievers
the Collars. they liked their urban adjacency and their rural demeanor
eldest son, two younger sisters, a mural of peaceful
until late that fateful day that it occurred they were equal.
for the longest time, they behaved like courteous people
transparent with each other, nothing blurred or deceitful
the middle sister, Blue, remained purposely see-through
while the brother - let’s call him White - grew nervous and fearful.

(the youngest sister? didn’t notice that she never was mentioned -
an awful shame, she never got a name or any attention)

back to Blue. the saddest truth was she was earnest and diligent
she worked for a living to earn her perch as a citizen
although she also judged her sister as worthless and indigent,
she always recognized it was better to show mercy than militance.

White was the surrogate, fit to bring the bacon home
paid in full - he also had more work, training and education though.
but his disposable income led to horrible symptoms -
excess meant investments with the singular aim of growth.
hard to blame him, no? what else is money there to do?
assist his sisters? ha! a thought he wouldn’t dare amuse
"the lower they are, the higher I get" - a scary truth
so to grow to the mountaintops, he knew he had to bury Blue.

“Blue,” he entreated, “I think we can help one another -
I’ve found a way to make money that no one’s discovered!
And it’s perfectly legal, nothing undercover,
just trying to help Middle Sis and be a good older - I mean, Upper Brother."
the bluff was smothered in too-good-to-be-true-isms
“Afford a home? No more rent?!” what could she refuse of him?
“All I have to do is sign, then,” BAM - approved! “It’s mine!"
"Congrats to Blue!” said White from the hood of a ruthless grin.

(but money influences, even when proof is ignored
so when Citizens United, White bought out the community board)

White ran Blue through the numbers only moments later
“You make 700 a week, so 1500 monthly should be no big favor -
until that mortgage is sorted, I’ll go ahead and hold the papers.
I only own parts of construction companies, at least you own your labor!"

"and oh, we won’t be neighbors. I’d prefer you down the street.
(plus that view of the underpass is really hard to beat!)
Now pardon me, I’m late and I should truly keep it moving
I have to run a board meeting for community improvement.”

Studiously, Blue went through the fine print of her contract
homeowner fees, insurance, shit, even a lawn tax.
had White gone mad?
he never mentioned these expenses, but he said he would help
altogether this only left her 300 monthly for EVERYTHING else.

Meanwhile White adjourned the meeting, few residents ever knew
they pledged subsidies for his companies by extending their revenue
from the people by the freeway, it’s their fault their homes are in disrepair
after all, taxing the mansions for that shit just isn’t fair.

Without a minute spared, White was confronted about the mortgage
“Don’t blame me, my job was done once you said you could afford it
I did my part. the real problem is our sister in the street begging for help
She’s the one causing higher taxes - why can’t she fend for herself?!"

Blue eventually fell for it, once foreclosure notices formed stacks
she needed someone to blame, someone to serve as a doormat
stuck in a poor trap, her sister was the ideal drone
her lot in life MUST be her fault…plus she’s too weak to speak on her own

Blue lost the keys to her home, lived on the street with no one to help her up
stuck to learn her new role: stay put and look cute till you self-destruct

03-21-2014, 11:42 PM	#2
oats Steel Cut Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 5,084 Battle Record: 19-10 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Fight Night LXXXIV - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 79005428	Suburban Timebomb OR The True Story of the Erosion of the Middle Class 4 Kidz! Once upon a time there was a family of suburban achievers the Collars. they liked their urban adjacency and their rural demeanor eldest son, two younger sisters, a mural of peaceful until late that fateful day that it occurred they were equal. for the longest time, they behaved like courteous people transparent with each other, nothing blurred or deceitful the middle sister, Blue, remained purposely see-through while the brother - let’s call him White - grew nervous and fearful. (the youngest sister? didn’t notice that she never was mentioned - an awful shame, she never got a name or any attention) back to Blue. the saddest truth was she was earnest and diligent she worked for a living to earn her perch as a citizen although she also judged her sister as worthless and indigent, she always recognized it was better to show mercy than militance. White was the surrogate, fit to bring the bacon home paid in full - he also had more work, training and education though. but his disposable income led to horrible symptoms - excess meant investments with the singular aim of growth. hard to blame him, no? what else is money there to do? assist his sisters? ha! a thought he wouldn’t dare amuse "the lower they are, the higher I get" - a scary truth so to grow to the mountaintops, he knew he had to bury Blue. “Blue,” he entreated, “I think we can help one another - I’ve found a way to make money that no one’s discovered! And it’s perfectly legal, nothing undercover, just trying to help Middle Sis and be a good older - I mean, Upper Brother." the bluff was smothered in too-good-to-be-true-isms “Afford a home? No more rent?!” what could she refuse of him? “All I have to do is sign, then,” BAM - approved! “It’s mine!" "Congrats to Blue!” said White from the hood of a ruthless grin. (but money influences, even when proof is ignored so when Citizens United, White bought out the community board) White ran Blue through the numbers only moments later “You make 700 a week, so 1500 monthly should be no big favor - until that mortgage is sorted, I’ll go ahead and hold the papers. I only own parts of construction companies, at least you own your labor!" "and oh, we won’t be neighbors. I’d prefer you down the street. (plus that view of the underpass is really hard to beat!) Now pardon me, I’m late and I should truly keep it moving I have to run a board meeting for community improvement.” Studiously, Blue went through the fine print of her contract homeowner fees, insurance, shit, even a lawn tax. had White gone mad? he never mentioned these expenses, but he said he would help altogether this only left her 300 monthly for EVERYTHING else. Meanwhile White adjourned the meeting, few residents ever knew they pledged subsidies for his companies by extending their revenue from the people by the freeway, it’s their fault their homes are in disrepair after all, taxing the mansions for that shit just isn’t fair. Without a minute spared, White was confronted about the mortgage “Don’t blame me, my job was done once you said you could afford it I did my part. the real problem is our sister in the street begging for help She’s the one causing higher taxes - why can’t she fend for herself?!" Blue eventually fell for it, once foreclosure notices formed stacks she needed someone to blame, someone to serve as a doormat stuck in a poor trap, her sister was the ideal drone her lot in life MUST be her fault…plus she’s too weak to speak on her own Blue lost the keys to her home, lived on the street with no one to help her up stuck to learn her new role: stay put and look cute till you self-destruct __________________ You should be water