Tomorrow is gravid.

PancakeBrah · 03-20-2014, 07:16 PM

This was my favorite piece of yours. Although the alien/mind invader piece from The Winter Topical's close.

I liked the little vignette to give your theme some color. Acted like a springboard. Expertly written. The only two spots I didn't like were 'whole brow' and 'axis information'. Aside from that I thought this was great. Had a clear theme/idea and you wrote it well. Each word had weight and purpose and the ender was well placed.

Sorry for the lack of in-depth feedback. I've read this a couple of times. I just haven't felt the motivation to break down pieces lately. But this was a gem.

03-20-2014, 07:16 PM	#12
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	This was my favorite piece of yours. Although the alien/mind invader piece from The Winter Topical's close. I liked the little vignette to give your theme some color. Acted like a springboard. Expertly written. The only two spots I didn't like were 'whole brow' and 'axis information'. Aside from that I thought this was great. Had a clear theme/idea and you wrote it well. Each word had weight and purpose and the ender was well placed. Sorry for the lack of in-depth feedback. I've read this a couple of times. I just haven't felt the motivation to break down pieces lately. But this was a gem. __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder