Week 3: Frank (2-0) vs. Ink (2-0) \\ Frank wins 6-4

timeless · 03-15-2014, 10:43 AM

frank, Lol I took some time in the beginning of the week to take on the same approach you took. I wrote ten lines and scapped it. This was dope though. All of the topics certain provided were begging to be used in one storyline, and im glad someone did it. The ending was perfect for it all as well. As for the writing, nothing to pick at really besides the flow in a couple spots, but thats a given in usually any verse ill read. Good shit dude.

Ink, even after a couple of reads I couldnt get into this tbh. Nothing made me say "that was dope" or quite jumped off the page to me. Your mechanics are decent. Sorry man dont have much else to say.

V. Frank

03-15-2014, 10:43 AM	#4
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	frank, Lol I took some time in the beginning of the week to take on the same approach you took. I wrote ten lines and scapped it. This was dope though. All of the topics certain provided were begging to be used in one storyline, and im glad someone did it. The ending was perfect for it all as well. As for the writing, nothing to pick at really besides the flow in a couple spots, but thats a given in usually any verse ill read. Good shit dude. Ink, even after a couple of reads I couldnt get into this tbh. Nothing made me say "that was dope" or quite jumped off the page to me. Your mechanics are decent. Sorry man dont have much else to say. V. Frank