CONGRATS TO LARS FOR WINNING THE INAUGURAL WINTER TOPICAL (srs this time)

Lars · 03-10-2014, 05:18 PM

I disagree, I've read your little ballerina ish before years ago so you def. have that to your arsenal.

I don't think you're as reliant, technically, on multies and rhyme scheme as I am, so I chose to make that more prominent in mine to showcase what I was doing.

Infact, there was a point in your verse where I saw you had made it more a multi-string in yours and thought you had done that deliberatly to counteract what I would do.

I laughed as I read it, maybe it was unintentional, but there you have it.

Your writing is way too formal at times, too, IMHO so I deliberately opened with something really informal sounding in the "for arguments sake, lets call 'em Alpha and Bet" thing.

It's only a slight thing, but hey, it worked...

03-10-2014, 05:18 PM	#15
Lars PROVEN BITER Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Wolverhampton Posts: 1,588 Battle Record: 5-0 Champed - The Winter Topical Rep Power: 1809298	I disagree, I've read your little ballerina ish before years ago so you def. have that to your arsenal. I don't think you're as reliant, technically, on multies and rhyme scheme as I am, so I chose to make that more prominent in mine to showcase what I was doing. Infact, there was a point in your verse where I saw you had made it more a multi-string in yours and thought you had done that deliberatly to counteract what I would do. I laughed as I read it, maybe it was unintentional, but there you have it. Your writing is way too formal at times, too, IMHO so I deliberately opened with something really informal sounding in the "for arguments sake, lets call 'em Alpha and Bet" thing. It's only a slight thing, but hey, it worked... __________________ PROVEN BITER Last edited by Lars; 03-10-2014 at 05:39 PM.