Week 2: Just Write (1-0) vs. El Pancake (1-0) \\ Just Write wins 9-1

e11even · 03-10-2014, 02:44 AM

JW- that drop was awesome, extensive, but awesome. I would say that was the neatest one I've seen over regulation length in recent time. Nice ending too. Very nice. I kinda think there should have been a little more rhyme involved, but it was already great as is.

PanPan- I loved the creativity that went into this piece. That said, I felt a little detached from the character. I don't think the character was developed enough to generate genuine concern. The backdrop was decent and I loved the language you used. But my end thoughts are that "the end" was unnecessary and the character wasn't as embedded in the story to give me that "well damn" feeling. Great drop though. I liked it otherwise.

MVGT JW for the better storytelling and cool ending. Good luck to you both.

03-10-2014, 02:44 AM	#12
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	JW- that drop was awesome, extensive, but awesome. I would say that was the neatest one I've seen over regulation length in recent time. Nice ending too. Very nice. I kinda think there should have been a little more rhyme involved, but it was already great as is. PanPan- I loved the creativity that went into this piece. That said, I felt a little detached from the character. I don't think the character was developed enough to generate genuine concern. The backdrop was decent and I loved the language you used. But my end thoughts are that "the end" was unnecessary and the character wasn't as embedded in the story to give me that "well damn" feeling. Great drop though. I liked it otherwise. MVGT JW for the better storytelling and cool ending. Good luck to you both. __________________ Ahem.