Week 2: Diode (1-0) vs. Adonis (1-0) \\ Adonis wins 9-7

Witty · 03-09-2014, 09:05 PM

Adonis - lololol dead @ you writing a topical battle verse. It was an entertaining read though, and very well written, the flow was fun too, some of it was a little too stop/start for me, but mostly you ket a nice rhythm which fit well with the theme of the verse. I like it when a writer doesn't take himself too seriously, humour is something which is sadly lacking in topical writing in general, I know there's the stereotype of the man poem, and that isn't without reason, so it's refreshing to see aomehing different. You did stick to the topic too, which is also impressive, it was actually quite a literal take on it, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, I do like to see unexpected takes on topics, things that I personally don't see in the topic until someone writes about it, so I take a few points off for that but you adhered to the topic, regardless, and you wrote a very entertaining piece. Props.

Diode - I thought this was a great read, started off a little shaky but when it got going it was a lot of fun to read. I don't think it fully reflected your technical ability as a writer, and what you can do from a mechanics standpoint, but that isn't always the be all and end all, you wrote an interesting, honest and well informed piece. It wasn't the firwith this gwneral idea, so again I will take a few points off for that but I did like it a lot, cool read.

Difficult one, both wrote entertaining pieces, they were fun to read, but gonna go with Diode.

03-09-2014, 09:05 PM	#9
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,978 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 85235118	Adonis - lololol dead @ you writing a topical battle verse. It was an entertaining read though, and very well written, the flow was fun too, some of it was a little too stop/start for me, but mostly you ket a nice rhythm which fit well with the theme of the verse. I like it when a writer doesn't take himself too seriously, humour is something which is sadly lacking in topical writing in general, I know there's the stereotype of the man poem, and that isn't without reason, so it's refreshing to see aomehing different. You did stick to the topic too, which is also impressive, it was actually quite a literal take on it, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, I do like to see unexpected takes on topics, things that I personally don't see in the topic until someone writes about it, so I take a few points off for that but you adhered to the topic, regardless, and you wrote a very entertaining piece. Props. Diode - I thought this was a great read, started off a little shaky but when it got going it was a lot of fun to read. I don't think it fully reflected your technical ability as a writer, and what you can do from a mechanics standpoint, but that isn't always the be all and end all, you wrote an interesting, honest and well informed piece. It wasn't the firwith this gwneral idea, so again I will take a few points off for that but I did like it a lot, cool read. Difficult one, both wrote entertaining pieces, they were fun to read, but gonna go with Diode. __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.