Week 2: Diode (1-0) vs. Adonis (1-0) \\ Adonis wins 9-7

Vulgar · 03-08-2014, 08:42 PM

Adonis - The flow in this was sick to me, I really liked what you did with it. The approach is radically different than what I'm used to, not only from you but from anyone. It was a slightly bizarre illustration about a website owner. Who happens to be Diode. I don't exactly know why you took that kind of a gamble, lol. I feel like you could've thought up something better, however, it was written well.

Diode - This was an okay read to me. You are a well read person and I'm sure you've read every author you mentioned in the text. The meaning of the piece was supported by the narrator's examples. I found it to be a little boring after reading it a few times. This is my main criticism. Otherwise, your rhyme schemes are smooth.

My vote goes to Adonis. He had the better verse.

03-08-2014, 08:42 PM	#8
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Adonis - The flow in this was sick to me, I really liked what you did with it. The approach is radically different than what I'm used to, not only from you but from anyone. It was a slightly bizarre illustration about a website owner. Who happens to be Diode. I don't exactly know why you took that kind of a gamble, lol. I feel like you could've thought up something better, however, it was written well. Diode - This was an okay read to me. You are a well read person and I'm sure you've read every author you mentioned in the text. The meaning of the piece was supported by the narrator's examples. I found it to be a little boring after reading it a few times. This is my main criticism. Otherwise, your rhyme schemes are smooth. My vote goes to Adonis. He had the better verse.