Week 1: YDK vs. Ink \\ Ink wins 9-8

dyedinthewool · 03-03-2014, 02:46 AM

YDK- I really liked this. Your piece was more imagery than story telling but I feel like you properly described the essence of “dead souls”. While I feel you could have stepped a bit more outside the box, your flow and your wording I feel gives you the upper hand here.

INK- this was good, but if I remember correctly enough, I have seen much, much better from you. This left me wanting more and your mechanics here were not as clean as they could have been. This stalled a bit for me and I think the flow had a lot to do with it. I do however think that your use of the topic was great

Mvgt ydk

03-03-2014, 02:46 AM	#1
dyedinthewool green eggs and damn Join Date: Feb 2014 Location: northeast Posts: 786 Battle Record: 1-4 Rep Power: 18308781	YDK- I really liked this. Your piece was more imagery than story telling but I feel like you properly described the essence of “dead souls”. While I feel you could have stepped a bit more outside the box, your flow and your wording I feel gives you the upper hand here. INK- this was good, but if I remember correctly enough, I have seen much, much better from you. This left me wanting more and your mechanics here were not as clean as they could have been. This stalled a bit for me and I think the flow had a lot to do with it. I do however think that your use of the topic was great Mvgt ydk