TWT CHAMPIONSHIP: (1)dead man vs. (7)Lars - LARS WINS 8-6

Adonis · 03-02-2014, 05:49 PM

First off, I've read each over a few times in the past couple of days, both equally amazing writtens that set a new standard for Championship Bouts. Usually by the time the finals roll around the competitors are burnt out and don't perform to there own standards. I feel like you two went beyond, great showing bitches!!!!

Lars - Heavy rhyme scheme that was juggled and dropped a few times, but I do appreciate the "not so easy" flow route, because of the degree of difficulty, when you were on it was fluid and made the lesser seem, well, insignificant especially when you add into the fact of progression of story and depth/symbolism or meaning put into literally each individual line. I loved the story, especially the beginning phases, but the ending seemed abrupt and a bit weak IMO. There was room for a deep meaning instead of "war, we failed". Although there was a lesson inside the verse, it seemed the lesson was second to simply ending the verse. Also, its minor, but looking at the picture I honestly can't correlate it to the verse, but I do understand the reasoning behind it. Solid effort, one of the better, 'knowledge' verses I've read in recent memory.

Black - The imagery in this entire verse was nearly overwhelming, you packed so much into such a short verse that honestly it took away from it. The flow from start to end was superb, and the overall story was dope. I love reading about Ancient Gods on my free time and watching any such documentary I can get, so reading this was naturally right up my ally. OK, so the imagery I referenced earlier was so in depth that you literally placed one to three snap shot photos into each individual line. From natural Lava Lamps of magma rising, to Sword fish dueling and other underwater urchins and creatures to a father speaking to his seedlings for the first time using wavelengths creating tornadoes to speak, fucking dope man.

Overall, these two verses should both be put into the HOF with out question. First verse spanned centruies from the first living molecule (water it seemed) to the ending of man kind as we know it. Second verse went into detail of Earths original inhabitants being God's, creating and living in there natural state of water.

Each verse is worthy of the victory, but there will be only one. I will vote of which I enjoyed solely because neither truly trumped the other in either concept, flow or any other aspect I typically vote on including execution, which you both did seamlessly and effortlessly, although I'm sure while writing these effortless they were not.

In the end, I must say the degree of difficulty in first verse was a bit higher, but while battling with who I wanted to vote for, I simply kept coming to the very same conclusion.

V/Deadman

For writing on a topic I love, so the connection between his verse and me is naturally a bit stronger

GREAT FUCKING BATTLE

03-02-2014, 05:49 PM	#11
Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946449	First off, I've read each over a few times in the past couple of days, both equally amazing writtens that set a new standard for Championship Bouts. Usually by the time the finals roll around the competitors are burnt out and don't perform to there own standards. I feel like you two went beyond, great showing bitches!!!! Lars - Heavy rhyme scheme that was juggled and dropped a few times, but I do appreciate the "not so easy" flow route, because of the degree of difficulty, when you were on it was fluid and made the lesser seem, well, insignificant especially when you add into the fact of progression of story and depth/symbolism or meaning put into literally each individual line. I loved the story, especially the beginning phases, but the ending seemed abrupt and a bit weak IMO. There was room for a deep meaning instead of "war, we failed". Although there was a lesson inside the verse, it seemed the lesson was second to simply ending the verse. Also, its minor, but looking at the picture I honestly can't correlate it to the verse, but I do understand the reasoning behind it. Solid effort, one of the better, 'knowledge' verses I've read in recent memory. Black - The imagery in this entire verse was nearly overwhelming, you packed so much into such a short verse that honestly it took away from it. The flow from start to end was superb, and the overall story was dope. I love reading about Ancient Gods on my free time and watching any such documentary I can get, so reading this was naturally right up my ally. OK, so the imagery I referenced earlier was so in depth that you literally placed one to three snap shot photos into each individual line. From natural Lava Lamps of magma rising, to Sword fish dueling and other underwater urchins and creatures to a father speaking to his seedlings for the first time using wavelengths creating tornadoes to speak, fucking dope man. Overall, these two verses should both be put into the HOF with out question. First verse spanned centruies from the first living molecule (water it seemed) to the ending of man kind as we know it. Second verse went into detail of Earths original inhabitants being God's, creating and living in there natural state of water. Each verse is worthy of the victory, but there will be only one. I will vote of which I enjoyed solely because neither truly trumped the other in either concept, flow or any other aspect I typically vote on including execution, which you both did seamlessly and effortlessly, although I'm sure while writing these effortless they were not. In the end, I must say the degree of difficulty in first verse was a bit higher, but while battling with who I wanted to vote for, I simply kept coming to the very same conclusion. V/Deadman For writing on a topic I love, so the connection between his verse and me is naturally a bit stronger GREAT FUCKING BATTLE __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR