Pharaoh Among Men

tyler · 02-23-2014, 03:18 PM

Really enjoyed this piece. It was very genuine and well put together. I thought a few lines needed work toward the end but that's me getting picky because overall nothing bored me about this and you accomplished everything u needed to in this piece. It sounded good reading it, had a good meaning behind it, and was depicted very smoothly. Overall near perfect piece here bud. Keep it up. Ps the first 14 lines are so were my favorite part, made me want to keep reading and were intriguing.

02-23-2014, 03:18 PM	#1
tyler Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 180 Battle Record: 5-9 Rep Power: 38	Really enjoyed this piece. It was very genuine and well put together. I thought a few lines needed work toward the end but that's me getting picky because overall nothing bored me about this and you accomplished everything u needed to in this piece. It sounded good reading it, had a good meaning behind it, and was depicted very smoothly. Overall near perfect piece here bud. Keep it up. Ps the first 14 lines are so were my favorite part, made me want to keep reading and were intriguing.