"Origin of Language"

zygote · 02-21-2014, 11:48 AM

Remember voting on this, you were in a contest against the user Certain. The story with the 2 characters at the beginning and the end wasn't really the selling point for me, it was more the physiological descriptive stuff and the evolutionary social focus parts in the middle that were really interesting and enjoyable. Also, the rhyming was excellent, liked the technical-ish words that you rhymed, and some introduction to new words like 'conveyance,' if one small criticism maybe this is incorrect but homogenizing may not be pronounced according to your multiple rhyme, I think it is more like homod-genizing.

02-21-2014, 11:48 AM	#1
zygote Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 501 Battle Record: 33-12 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Art of Writing League (3x) Rep Power: 737828	Remember voting on this, you were in a contest against the user Certain. The story with the 2 characters at the beginning and the end wasn't really the selling point for me, it was more the physiological descriptive stuff and the evolutionary social focus parts in the middle that were really interesting and enjoyable. Also, the rhyming was excellent, liked the technical-ish words that you rhymed, and some introduction to new words like 'conveyance,' if one small criticism maybe this is incorrect but homogenizing may not be pronounced according to your multiple rhyme, I think it is more like homod-genizing. Last edited by zygote; 02-21-2014 at 11:52 AM.