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Old 02-11-2014, 08:19 AM   #1
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Looking through glass
I see myself as I reflect
The moments that have passed
Life is done in reps
It's spinning much to fast
A maelstrom of my regrets
Envelops me like a mask
and it takes away my breath


The thunder rages under tasteless sky's while younger faces smile
In this chapter of life the pages blunder by and encumber shapeless guile
No wonder age is vile, because the previous events we see in sequence
The deviance imprints itself tediously hence why expedience is pent
I'm tarnished from the hail that I harness when the carnage is inhaled
Garnished and impaled by the heartless as they harvest every fail
Soon the darkness will unveil what would once shimmer in the light
Brightness hindering my sight now I linger in the night, misery takes flight
Luminous affects cause me to ruminate aspects of life without scrupulous intent
I want to be humorous again at a numerous percent without hallucinogens
Everybody is encompassed by a cloud of comforting convictions
Stuck inside the circumference of a shroud, suffering infliction
But an uplifting depiction can be encrypted from the misery ensued
You can change the shape of history and cut the injury literally in two

A riddle in the form
of geometric shapes
scribbled in a storm
that's taking on my traits
I'm crippled from the thorn
and shaking from the weight
stippled and deformed
from this aura I create


Never have I been stuck inside a cage that made me feel so close to home
Severed from my rambunctious tidal waves that the ocean throws unknown
The water hits the cool air and crystallizes beneath the midnight sky
The breeze is met with some resistance and so the crystals fled right by
And the emotions set upon them will make certain they create
A slideshow of all shapes and sizes not predetermined by fate

At the end of the day
I know why it is I try
because it is true what they say
that beauty is in the eye
of the one who holds the day
and with the time that has gone by
I know I must embrace
the beauty before I die

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have you ever been scissor kicked in the neck?
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I would love to see your skinny ass try (seen your pics faggot). Ever been sniped from 800 m away with a 7.62×51mmM40? Come at me bro
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I would love to see your skinny ass try (seen your pics faggot). Ever been sniped from 800 m away with a 7.62×51mmM40? Come at me bro
lmao your obviously a bitch. You gonna come at me with gun threats? And scissor kicked in the neck? Seriously you're gonna take that shit personally? Its called a joke, but now that I see how much of an emotional faggot you are I can ascertain I would 100% knock your ass out in a fist fight, youd win in the gun fight though
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Well why does he have to be such a tampon using queer bait? he cant handle a little scissor kick in the neck joke? Fuck you army people are depressing as fuck.
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What the fuck did you just fucking say about me, you little bitch? I’ll have you know I graduated top of my class in the Navy Seals, and I’ve been involved in numerous secret raids on Al-Quaeda, and I have over 300 confirmed kills. I am trained in gorilla warfare and I’m the top sniper in the entire US armed forces. You are nothing to me but just another target. I will wipe you the fuck out with precision the likes of which has never been seen before on this Earth, mark my fucking words. You think you can get away with saying that shit to me over the Internet? Think again, fucker. As we speak I am contacting my secret network of spies across the USA and your IP is being traced right now so you better prepare for the storm, maggot. The storm that wipes out the pathetic little thing you call your life. You’re fucking dead, kid. I can be anywhere, anytime, and I can kill you in over seven hundred ways, and that’s just with my bare hands. Not only am I extensively trained in unarmed combat, but I have access to the entire arsenal of the United States Marine Corps and I will use it to its full extent to wipe your miserable ass off the face of the continent, you little shit. If only you could have known what unholy retribution your little “clever” comment was about to bring down upon you, maybe you would have held your fucking tongue. But you couldn’t, you didn’t, and now you’re paying the price, you goddamn idiot. I will shit fury all over you and you will drown in it. You’re fucking dead, kiddo.

I don’t give a fuck who you are or where you live. You can count on me to be there to bring your fucking life to a hellish end. I’ll put you in so much fucking pain that it’ll make Jesus being nailed to a cross in the desert look like a fucking back massage on a tropical island. I don’t give a fuck how many reps you have or how tough you are IRL, how well you can fight, or how many fucking guns you own to protect yourself. I’ll fucking show up at your house when you aren’t home. I’ll turn all the lights on in your house, leave all the water running, open your fridge door and not close it, and turn your gas stove burners on and let them waste gas. You’re going to start stressing the fuck out, your blood pressure will triple, and you’ll have a fucking heart attack. You’ll go to the hospital for a heart operation, and the last thing you’ll see when you’re being put under in the operating room is me hovering above you, dressed like a doctor. When you wake up after being operated on, wondering what ticking time bomb is in your chest waiting to go off. You’ll recover fully from your heart surgery. And when you walk out the front door of the hospital to go home I’ll run you over with my fucking car out of no where and kill you. I just want you to know how easily I could fucking destroy your pathetic excuse of a life, but how I’d rather go to a great fuckng length to make sure your last remaining days are spent in a living, breathing fucking hell. It’s too late to save yourself, but don’t bother committing suicide either… I’ll fucking resuscitate you and kill you again myself you bitch-faced phaggot. Welcome to hell, population: you.
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just as i thought, tampon using female. And just like the american army to wipe out innocent civilians. Your army is pathetic killing innocent people and shit. lmao at 300 kills under your belt. You're so full of shit your breath stinks.
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What the fuck did you just fucking say about me, you little bitch? I’ll have you know I graduated top of my class in the Navy Seals, and I’ve been involved in numerous secret raids on Al-Quaeda, and I have over 300 confirmed kills. I am trained in gorilla warfare and I’m the top sniper in the entire US armed forces. You are nothing to me but just another target. I will wipe you the fuck out with precision the likes of which has never been seen before on this Earth, mark my fucking words. You think you can get away with saying that shit to me over the Internet? Think again, fucker. As we speak I am contacting my secret network of spies across the USA and your IP is being traced right now so you better prepare for the storm, maggot. The storm that wipes out the pathetic little thing you call your life. You’re fucking dead, kid. I can be anywhere, anytime, and I can kill you in over seven hundred ways, and that’s just with my bare hands. Not only am I extensively trained in unarmed combat, but I have access to the entire arsenal of the United States Marine Corps and I will use it to its full extent to wipe your miserable ass off the face of the continent, you little shit. If only you could have known what unholy retribution your little “clever” comment was about to bring down upon you, maybe you would have held your fucking tongue. But you couldn’t, you didn’t, and now you’re paying the price, you goddamn idiot. I will shit fury all over you and you will drown in it. You’re fucking dead, kiddo.

I don’t give a fuck who you are or where you live. You can count on me to be there to bring your fucking life to a hellish end. I’ll put you in so much fucking pain that it’ll make Jesus being nailed to a cross in the desert look like a fucking back massage on a tropical island. I don’t give a fuck how many reps you have or how tough you are IRL, how well you can fight, or how many fucking guns you own to protect yourself. I’ll fucking show up at your house when you aren’t home. I’ll turn all the lights on in your house, leave all the water running, open your fridge door and not close it, and turn your gas stove burners on and let them waste gas. You’re going to start stressing the fuck out, your blood pressure will triple, and you’ll have a fucking heart attack. You’ll go to the hospital for a heart operation, and the last thing you’ll see when you’re being put under in the operating room is me hovering above you, dressed like a doctor. When you wake up after being operated on, wondering what ticking time bomb is in your chest waiting to go off. You’ll recover fully from your heart surgery. And when you walk out the front door of the hospital to go home I’ll run you over with my fucking car out of no where and kill you. I just want you to know how easily I could fucking destroy your pathetic excuse of a life, but how I’d rather go to a great fuckng length to make sure your last remaining days are spent in a living, breathing fucking hell. It’s too late to save yourself, but don’t bother committing suicide either… I’ll fucking resuscitate you and kill you again myself you bitch-faced phaggot. Welcome to hell, population: you.

This made me lol so fucking loud hahaha. Bravo
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ok just being honest

this wasnt bad

it just didnt captivate me at all

i almost enjoyed the shorter lines more than the rest

some just seemed to drawn out, or fragmented.

moreoever, rhymes weren't crisp or fluid...like that 'pent' line

it wasnt bad, just not my cup of tea
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ok just being honest

this wasnt bad

it just didnt captivate me at all

i almost enjoyed the shorter lines more than the rest

some just seemed to drawn out, or fragmented.

moreoever, rhymes weren't crisp or fluid...like that 'pent' line

it wasnt bad, just not my cup of tea
Thanks for the feed dude, much appreciated.
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wtf baron mynd. You sneaky prick. I knew I recognized the word p e r f e c t shit.
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You best step down piss pot black eye!
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17 replies with only 1 of em bein feed lmao. Quit writing bud
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quit writing? I'll fucking eat u up on any topical faggot. Step the fuck down. Its not my fault this site is filled with a bunch of queers who are to stupid to even leave proper feedback. Go hoop your forehead and take a big old inward shit you fucking queer.
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