Hold the pillow.

Wise Wiggles · 03-10-2013, 01:32 AM

this is for you lone rangers, that hate allegiance
every django has his day- damn near taste the freedom
seen it all before, just couldn't frame the sequence
seen the sun set, just couldn't chase the pheonix
walk in the clouds, a grape for squeezing
it's cancer cartons, kush & beer
rafter carvings- brooks was here
fresh scars be scaring the women
something's gotta work cuz therapy didn't
a bear with these writtens of terrible visions
you think God really cares if we sinning ?
melt with me- hold the pillow, I'm Jeremy piven
hell? I see your raise, now deal the turn
i got no poker face.. no real concern
well tailored self immolation- I don't feel the burn
just gather up the ashes and seal the urn
throw me in a gust, cliffside, right near a sea
watch me fly away & disappear like bees
just an empty tin man, no gears to squeak
most snakes end up sleeping w/the eels or worms
the hood's Lector. Eat your cheek for good measure
oh look, pepper! now the flesh'll cook better
rainy days ain't so bad, you need wet to grow
you lennon's need to let it be & let it go
no one's perfect- we all human from head to toe
time stops, toasting w/my pops like depp in blow

Fig · 03-10-2013, 01:48 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Wise Ass

this is for you lone rangers, that hate allegiance
every django has his day- damn near taste the freedom
seen it all before, just couldn't frame the sequence
seen the sun set, just couldn't chase the pheonix

that was a tight intro. I liked the piece alot, sometimes the scheme threw me off guard though, like here:

Quote:

Originally Posted by Wise Ass

walk in the clouds, a grape for squeezing
it's cancer cartons, kush & beer
rafter carvings- brooks was here
fresh scars be scaring the women

made it a bit awkward to read, but other than this bit, it read perfectly fine. good post.

Frank · 03-10-2013, 03:06 AM

Hahaha. Lively rhyme - almost revived the forum single handidly

it's cancer cartons, kush & beer
rafter carvings- brooks was here

don't go awol join AOWL

-frank was here-

Split · 03-11-2013, 02:15 PM

rainy days ain't so bad, you need wet to grow
you lennon's need to let it be & let it go
no one's perfect- we all human from head to toe
time stops, toasting w/my pops like depp in blow

Word. Go feed someone asshole.

Dove Dozer · 03-11-2013, 05:18 PM

this was dope. it actually made me delay posting my own shit.

damn this flowed so fluid

03-10-2013, 01:32 AM	#1
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	Hold the pillow. this is for you lone rangers, that hate allegiance every django has his day- damn near taste the freedom seen it all before, just couldn't frame the sequence seen the sun set, just couldn't chase the pheonix walk in the clouds, a grape for squeezing it's cancer cartons, kush & beer rafter carvings- brooks was here fresh scars be scaring the women something's gotta work cuz therapy didn't a bear with these writtens of terrible visions you think God really cares if we sinning ? melt with me- hold the pillow, I'm Jeremy piven hell? I see your raise, now deal the turn i got no poker face.. no real concern well tailored self immolation- I don't feel the burn just gather up the ashes and seal the urn throw me in a gust, cliffside, right near a sea watch me fly away & disappear like bees just an empty tin man, no gears to squeak most snakes end up sleeping w/the eels or worms the hood's Lector. Eat your cheek for good measure oh look, pepper! now the flesh'll cook better rainy days ain't so bad, you need wet to grow you lennon's need to let it be & let it go no one's perfect- we all human from head to toe time stops, toasting w/my pops like depp in blow

03-10-2013, 03:06 AM	#3
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853347	Hahaha. Lively rhyme - almost revived the forum single handidly it's cancer cartons, kush & beer rafter carvings- brooks was here don't go awol join AOWL -frank was here- __________________ *VETWORK*

03-11-2013, 02:15 PM	#4
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899399	rainy days ain't so bad, you need wet to grow you lennon's need to let it be & let it go no one's perfect- we all human from head to toe time stops, toasting w/my pops like depp in blow Word. Go feed someone asshole. __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

03-11-2013, 05:18 PM	#5
Dove Dozer loose leaf bruce lee Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,077 Battle Record: 7-6 Rep Power: 1853216	this was dope. it actually made me delay posting my own shit. damn this flowed so fluid