AOWL Week 4: Aesthetic (0-1) VS. Split (2-1) [SPLIT WINS, 5-0.]

[bleak]

Split- you had a lot of small details added in that really made this verse stand out. I like how you took the sound in the beat and incorporated it into your verse. I was getting an Atlantis vibe from the 2nd stanza, and if that was what you going for, you did a good job of employing it. You did leave a lot to ponder, like you took it just to the point of description without giving up the whole story.

medusa oblongata- came to the crawling Caesar's call, he-
armed with endless tendrils of truth, ink in his blood- fights flight.
curious, in hindsight... the filthy mud hasn't quite yet settled in these centuries.
outside the manuscripts. who, what stalked these ancient fantasies?
the final antechamber, the scholar reaches in the dark

my favorite part

Aesthetic- some of your verse was obscure to me, it may have been the word choice. I did like certain parts, I'm just not sure if there was a meaning behind all of it. It's just my personal preference, of course, for there to be a backdrop. You just didn't put me anywhere, I was stuck in the lines and couldn't decipher where it was going next.

So I meditate extant with content.
Wondering repent with simple descent.
Fuck intent, either way you shoot decent.

Emotions run wild, like a forest's child.

v/Split