AOWL Week 4: Pryde (0-0) VS. Adonis (0-0) [ADONIS WINS, 7-0.]

Mike Wrecka · 03-10-2013, 08:50 PM

nice battle fellas.

Adonis- I was impressed with your verse. first stuff I read from you. nice flow and it was easy to read but contained a fairly complex structure. good job. nice direction. the second part I didn't love but ya overall the whole verse just seemed way too short. stretch it out next time.

pryde- good stuff. nice flow. that opening bar was cool. I feel like you possibly wasted some space with the repetitive lines. and your was also short

overall- it was fairly close. both took the same direction but I enjoyed Adonis verse more. was a bit more complex and kept my attention a little more. good battle.

03-10-2013, 08:50 PM	#11
Mike Wrecka WOW Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,591 Battle Record: 29-25 Champed - Writing Challenge League I Rep Power: 82779338	nice battle fellas. Adonis- I was impressed with your verse. first stuff I read from you. nice flow and it was easy to read but contained a fairly complex structure. good job. nice direction. the second part I didn't love but ya overall the whole verse just seemed way too short. stretch it out next time. pryde- good stuff. nice flow. that opening bar was cool. I feel like you possibly wasted some space with the repetitive lines. and your was also short overall- it was fairly close. both took the same direction but I enjoyed Adonis verse more. was a bit more complex and kept my attention a little more. good battle.