ROUND TWO: (8)ZYG vs. (9)big baby - (BIG BABY WINS 6-3)

dead man · 01-28-2014, 01:23 AM

zyg - unlike other voters, i had not heard this parable before reading it in your verse and thought it was really an excellent interpretive device for the topic at hand. your focus is so central around the idea you want to convey, and the 'technical' aspect seems to be a peripheral objective. i think this is a strategy that really gives you a distinct advantage over opponents that strictly use their rhyming and rhythmic skills based around a weaker central theme. i felt as though i was reading an original scripture of this ancient tale, one used to teach children of the power and consequences of subjectivity in simpler terms. excellent submission.

baby da big baby - what makes this match so difficult to vote on is not only the obvious clash of styles, but the clash of strategy. while zygote is content to allow his focal thesis direct a very straight-forward approach to a topic, you use a much more indirect and wax poetical method of achieving this goal. that being said, i think your skeletal structure was a weaker one than zygote presented. it was a rather obvious sequence of events (ie., seasonal progressions through a relationship), dressed in beautiful description and literary device. codependent prophet being my favorite segment of the entire verse. you have the ability to express your ideas with powerful wording and a rhythmic pace that is both unorthodox and extremely effective in carrying our focus from one idea to the next. it would be unfair for me to tell you i did not enjoy this verse because as far as pure lyricism is concerned (insofar as it applies to this league) it was the best work dropped this week by a long shot. however, i cannot shake a correlation ready-at-hand between this verse and yet another parable, the emperor's new clothes. as if there is so much beautiful language and descriptive content wrapped around what is an average-at-best framework.

for this reason alone, although it almost pains me to do so, i have to ride with zygote this week.

this is botw in my eyes.

genuine thanks to both of you.

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01-28-2014, 01:23 AM	#1
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,486 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	zyg - unlike other voters, i had not heard this parable before reading it in your verse and thought it was really an excellent interpretive device for the topic at hand. your focus is so central around the idea you want to convey, and the 'technical' aspect seems to be a peripheral objective. i think this is a strategy that really gives you a distinct advantage over opponents that strictly use their rhyming and rhythmic skills based around a weaker central theme. i felt as though i was reading an original scripture of this ancient tale, one used to teach children of the power and consequences of subjectivity in simpler terms. excellent submission. baby da big baby - what makes this match so difficult to vote on is not only the obvious clash of styles, but the clash of strategy. while zygote is content to allow his focal thesis direct a very straight-forward approach to a topic, you use a much more indirect and wax poetical method of achieving this goal. that being said, i think your skeletal structure was a weaker one than zygote presented. it was a rather obvious sequence of events (ie., seasonal progressions through a relationship), dressed in beautiful description and literary device. codependent prophet being my favorite segment of the entire verse. you have the ability to express your ideas with powerful wording and a rhythmic pace that is both unorthodox and extremely effective in carrying our focus from one idea to the next. it would be unfair for me to tell you i did not enjoy this verse because as far as pure lyricism is concerned (insofar as it applies to this league) it was the best work dropped this week by a long shot. however, i cannot shake a correlation ready-at-hand between this verse and yet another parable, the emperor's new clothes. as if there is so much beautiful language and descriptive content wrapped around what is an average-at-best framework. for this reason alone, although it almost pains me to do so, i have to ride with zygote this week. this is botw in my eyes. genuine thanks to both of you. 1 __________________ Zack Wicks for president