ROUND ONE: (14)Split Eight vs. (19)Veritas - (SPLIT EIGHT WINS 5-2)

trap. · 01-18-2014, 06:16 PM

Split. Well worded. Too much for my liking. Thought I had an idea of where you were going with the beginning. Had no clue during the middle of the first verse. At the end of the first verse, a tiger approaches. About the same for the second, except a cage was in there. Totally couldn't relate to any of it. However, it was impressive just by design.

V. Your verses were more clearer. I liked the beginning. Somewhere in the middle it got murky, mostly with thr way you tried to force multis into the tigers viewing of each person. By that point you could tell where the story was going, but that's not your fault. This was a lot more appealing to my senses. The verbiage was less strong but kind of carefully crafted.

I guess I'm going against the grain here. My vote is for V.

01-18-2014, 06:16 PM	#7
trap. Senior Citizen Join Date: Aug 1997 Posts: 3,870 Battle Record: 4-3 Rep Power: 0	Split. Well worded. Too much for my liking. Thought I had an idea of where you were going with the beginning. Had no clue during the middle of the first verse. At the end of the first verse, a tiger approaches. About the same for the second, except a cage was in there. Totally couldn't relate to any of it. However, it was impressive just by design. V. Your verses were more clearer. I liked the beginning. Somewhere in the middle it got murky, mostly with thr way you tried to force multis into the tigers viewing of each person. By that point you could tell where the story was going, but that's not your fault. This was a lot more appealing to my senses. The verbiage was less strong but kind of carefully crafted. I guess I'm going against the grain here. My vote is for V.