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Old 01-18-2014, 01:08 AM   #7
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lars

jessica pinkman? maybe I'll google her. know what i'm saying? it was much too much of a namedrop. untimely at that. perhaps I am just ignorant and should know jessica pinkman because now she has my attention tenfold. i need to know who she is. the verse depends on me googling her name. 2 lazy. verse was refinery. a sing-songy see-sawy flow that you so admirably cheek around your town with. fast paced first player shooter navy seal like delivery

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if i inspired you, you have inspired me. this piece was contained-epicness. your best work to date as far as i am an concerned. a very broad interpretation of a creative world that was quite the journey.

this is where it gets tricky.

first round protocol is first round protocol. a certain degree of nonchalantness must be administered. it's like a dinner right? first round is always appetizers. you don't want to spoil your appetite with epic shit this early in the feast of champions.

not always the case

A modern Ghengis Kahn trained Iran, then enslaved Islam,
and became the equivalent of US when they invaded Nam.
He funded African countries in exchange of aided arms,
red alarms rung when opposition was met with harm

"met with harm" took a lyrically nose dive. the wording was exceptional up until than and then you make a lackadaisical word choice and knock down the jenga set.

a distant tale versus an up close and personal rushing the barracks type verse.

i got lars in a good fight
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