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The COAT...
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![]() Dissecting a Profane Mystery Enigma Vulgar Split I'm a cloak and dagger vagabond who shadow box in blackness with assassins thoughts Last attacks have stopped, it's re-enacted mummification the way you wrapped in gauze Planned combat with bars have trapped me Use the hand of God to crack the padded lock I'm past Islamic, stand in chalk and ink a magic psalm that plants a massive bomb That latch to thoughts, evolving fast beyond the passive pawns and terrorists who stand in awe Go grab and stab a happy heart till beats are bland, so bleak that raptures target memories You're reading texts so deep that each could test the depth of seas cause E's the best in breed Complex emcee, I hold my breath to breathe Out-step the deadly feet of leprosy to rep the 3 Pushing prison pens, defeat means death to me These bars don't cage me, nay they set me free Conceived in thirty three degrees of darkness Harness evil shards of steel and carve With scimitars, I cleave apart the trees in Eden's garden, weaving barkskin sheets of armor Separate species, artist with the heat of arson's Beast of carnage, sharp as the teeth I'm barring Gentle people, pardon me for being partially sephardic On your mark, jetset, finish. Sip champagne from minarets in Minsk. |
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Razor-thin derision
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Both killed it. Thanks for having me on this.
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SYRACUSE
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NICE
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yea, this was craaazy!
no need for critiquing, im not even sure whos verse was whos! great shit tho yall!
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The COAT...
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Appreciate it! The staggering of the names at the top correlate to the verses, they are staggered to represent whose verse is whose
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Arm the Homeless
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Some pretty dope shit fellas. Props on this piece. Dope flow and some mad content in here. I'll drop my favs from each verse.
I'm past Islamic, stand in chalk and ink a magic psalm that plants a massive bomb That latch to thoughts, evolving fast beyond the passive pawns and terrorists who stand in awe Go grab and stab a happy heart till beats are bland, so bleak that raptures target memories You're reading texts so deep that each could test the depth of seas cause E's the best in breed Hiveminds are interconnected stadiums, the Colisseum was a piece of the mold And honestly, this bloodlust policy is just a leech in my lobe coaxing out the most active senses sensing toxicity in civilian clothes Modesty is hideous, subconsciously make pilgrimage to ghost towns I court the lucid dream of safety, death's forty night revolution. Pregnant influx of numbing uselessness- Till then I'll smoke karmic butts under neon signs for imminent proof requests, like whose culture will we pollute next? New Zealand, they're too sick of pretty environments. Once again props fellas. Really nothing bad to say about this piece |
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This is in no way a selfless bump. Sincere thanks to Vulgar and Split for giving me two dope verses.
..... ... More feed would be dope |
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That was ill. Your verse was the perfect opener for the onslaught that was to come. Your verse had the best flow imo Quote:
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Overall, crazy piece from some strong writers, and that's all I can really say lol. |
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Enjoyable reading material. Vulgar, Enigma and Split some of my favorites to read. Distinctive styles but meshed well. Some things to think about but also some instant rewards.
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thanks for the read. I'll return favors, last UPS
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this was dope, will edit as i have time with highlights and further comments
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I'm not in the mood to give real feed. But this was HOF nom worthy.
If you all hadn't outlined who wrote what I would've guessed wrong. Well done, boyos.
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I check back on this post every day do see if you've edited in feed.
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oh shit hahaha
WILL DO BRO
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