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Old 01-10-2014, 07:51 PM   #9
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I like the way you describe the man with the cane
passing by day after day it was an interesting approach.

"I saw him once before,
As he passed by the door,
And again
The pavement stones resound,
As he totters o’er the ground
With his cane."

The next part seemed to describe the change in times from the old mans perspective and how it affects and inflicts him. Again a very unique approach!

"Life’s an intricate system of “tension” and “change”
spanning far beyond subatomic physical plane
observe the pacing, disaccharidase, digital age
idle intolerance; an argument for Heidegger’s claim
“Inanimate object”! Heh...ironic twist of conjugal fate
At least in this context; marriage, mix...lethargic exchange"

From here it seemed to go into a dream of what could have been for the man career wise but ended up waking up in a dead end job.
Great read!
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