Split Melonsville

[dead man]

All these leaders be pawns
backed by pieces that fall
mostly down by the way side in a heap on this board

enjoyed the linkage between all three of these lines. chess is very often used and almost cliche'd simile in many modern literary works but i think you did it justice at the very least.

might leave you feelin' unsure
or with no fuckin' feelings at all

cool

have your collarbones shifted
just for bein' here fool
left with an oddly pose different to whom appear as the norm.

you get better the more often you write. you take long hiatuses and then reappear with decent work. but the longer you remain on site writing and posting it's like you being tp find your frequency again and drop more resonant shit.

it speaks to the naturality you may possess as a rhyme writer. that's all i can say.

hope you stick around man.


thanks



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