Unknown Cyber Heroes

Eŋg · 01-05-2014, 02:39 PM

flesh it out more.

i generally like the way you write because it borders on free-form, and you place your rhymes well. your verses tend to have an energy about them for that reason. your line/breaks (wow technical term) seemed to emphasize the rhythm yet make it less obvious, too. that doesn't make sense but i think it's just reading versus speaking. the meter was fine. nothing felt particularly stilted.

01-05-2014, 02:39 PM	#2
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	flesh it out more. i generally like the way you write because it borders on free-form, and you place your rhymes well. your verses tend to have an energy about them for that reason. your line/breaks (wow technical term) seemed to emphasize the rhythm yet make it less obvious, too. that doesn't make sense but i think it's just reading versus speaking. the meter was fine. nothing felt particularly stilted.