There's Something Terribly Wrong Here...

Ink · 03-03-2013, 02:33 PM

@Split : the twist was a joke... in that everyone probably expected the piece to be something intense because of the topic.. so i made it to revolve about a pick up line

@Genocide and @ZenLand : y'know, as far as feedback, it's the first time i heard that the rhythm was off for this particular piece. I can see where you're coming from though, definitely appreciate the feedback. By "tying rhymes together" are you referring to some of the off rhymes used or the placement of the rhymes within lines?

See you all in the topical league at some point.. I find that I don't work on my personal pieces as much when I'm part of a league, so I'm trying to balance my time between the two.

03-03-2013, 02:33 PM	#1
Ink Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 329 Battle Record: 5-5 Rep Power: 60	@Split : the twist was a joke... in that everyone probably expected the piece to be something intense because of the topic.. so i made it to revolve about a pick up line @Genocide and @ZenLand : y'know, as far as feedback, it's the first time i heard that the rhythm was off for this particular piece. I can see where you're coming from though, definitely appreciate the feedback. By "tying rhymes together" are you referring to some of the off rhymes used or the placement of the rhymes within lines? See you all in the topical league at some point.. I find that I don't work on my personal pieces as much when I'm part of a league, so I'm trying to balance my time between the two.