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Old 12-22-2013, 07:26 PM   #8
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peoples reaction to this verse is why i don't bother posting here. i didn't like it from the very first line. easy scheme not done well, cohesiveness was lost stretching or forcing rhymes. little flow and idea how to structure lines properly.

if you editted it down to the parts that rhyme and make sense, you'd have a dope 4 bar scheme. but you'd need to keep it short as the rhyme scheme is too obvious repetitive and you lack the ability to switch it up in other ways.
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