DOPEST VERSE I'vE EVER WRITTEN AND RECOrdeD

[Badweather]

https://soundcloud.com/roach-badweather/not-a-game

genre over!

lyrics:

this is not a game guess who's on a quest
bird's eye view, flew the coop left the nest
been on the road, with this roll of stress
thinking "what kind of doors i can open next?"

good workers show emotions? yes!
but no success means….no success
walking in the sand steps get ocean swept
know an undertow's not what to stroke against

feel the wave fall, trying to get your name off
showing up for something but forgetting what you came for
i tend to aim for
hitting a target that's impossible to possibly be blamed for

i feel my brain course,i'm like the main course
8 bits left, don't know why i play this game for
…but a lot of problems like me
a lot of people lyin' they should gobble up and bite me

[Untold]

lookin to get someone on the rest of this?

dope verse yo

[Badweather]

Originally Posted by Untold

lookin to get someone on the rest of this?

dope verse yo

yup

i'm hoping @Genocide is one of those takers. after he confirms, it's up to who we decide goes third

[Badweather]

no?

[Witty]

I can only read atm but this was dope...the first two lines were a bit wooden, when written at least but it got ill from there and stated ill.

I will listen soon.

[Badweather]

Originally Posted by Witty

I can only read atm but this was dope...the first two lines were a bit wooden, when written at least but it got ill from there and stated ill.

I will listen soon.

you won't be disappointed

[Untold]

Man I may need to hop on that

[Badweather]

Originally Posted by Untold

Man I may need to hop on that

let me hear what you got

[Untold]

I'm a have to send ya something later. At a Christmas party righty now. I'm a hawla

[Badweather]

word.

@joe metts
thoughts?

[Badweather]

lmao, worrrrrd

[Certain]

I dislike this beat until the fuller sound comes in for the hook, but this definitely is the best verse I've heard from you.

Make it a solo track. Add some bass and reverb to the beat. Don't use a hook. Rap over that fuller sounding beat by upping the intensity. A few punch-ins or overdubs might make the rap stand out more, too.

[Badweather]

Originally Posted by Certain

I dislike this beat until the fuller sound comes in for the hook, but this definitely is the best verse I've heard from you.

Make it a solo track. Add some bass and reverb to the beat. Don't use a hook. Rap over that fuller sounding beat by upping the intensity. A few punch-ins or overdubs might make the rap stand out more, too.

like a weezy mixtape verse!

[Seyance]

you rhymed 'for' four times.. ironically, not sure why. flow wasn't all that bad just the rhymes were lacking any sort of complexity and vocab. decent message behind it all and that was the most cohesive part of it.

[Badweather]

Originally Posted by Seyance

you rhymed 'for' four times.. ironically, not sure why. flow wasn't all that bad just the rhymes were lacking any sort of complexity and vocab. decent message behind it all and that was the most cohesive part of it.

word, back in the beginning i wanted to use a lot of vocab. it's great when its on paper, but doesn't always translate very well over to a song. keeping it simple allowed me to be more freeflowing over the beat.

complexity makes people think, and sometimes i want listeners to hear some easily understandable shit. thanks for peeping and commenting sey, i appreciate it brother!

[Seyance]

yeah i feel that, i definitely got the message as the strongest part of it.. the ridiculous rhymes and over complex vocab can sometimes cloud the real message your trying to put forward to a listener/reader. refreshing to deal with a level headed emcee these days who takes feedback like advice and not hate.