AOWL WK 3: Vinzr (0-0) VS. Aesthetic (0-0) [VINZR WINS, 7-1.]

Mike Wrecka · 02-28-2013, 10:10 PM

cool battle.

aesthetic- the blue font gotta go. lol. anyway this was cool in parts, but pretty basic in others. needed more multis and inner rhmes. good vocab though. and good message. the written paragraph, well not sure what that was. this is a rhyming topical league so that seemed out of place. good showing though

vinzr - nice verse. I enjoyed it. good rhyme scheme structure and word choice. opened strong

overall - while aesthetic had some good thoughts and concepts I feel that he was in only rhyming one word at the end of each line mode for too much of the verse. Vinzr had the superior rhyme scheme and it pulled out the W.

vote-vinz

02-28-2013, 10:10 PM	#8
Mike Wrecka WOW Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,591 Battle Record: 29-25 Champed - Writing Challenge League I Rep Power: 82779338	cool battle. aesthetic- the blue font gotta go. lol. anyway this was cool in parts, but pretty basic in others. needed more multis and inner rhmes. good vocab though. and good message. the written paragraph, well not sure what that was. this is a rhyming topical league so that seemed out of place. good showing though vinzr - nice verse. I enjoyed it. good rhyme scheme structure and word choice. opened strong overall - while aesthetic had some good thoughts and concepts I feel that he was in only rhyming one word at the end of each line mode for too much of the verse. Vinzr had the superior rhyme scheme and it pulled out the W. vote-vinz