Playoffs Round 1: No. 5 PancakeBrah vs. No. 12 YDK - PANCAKEBRAH WINS 6-MINUS-5

patrown · 12-11-2013, 11:56 PM

ydk - you had my full attention until

shouldn't have to pray for the night I'll be safe; From myself;
in bed shaking my pillow case and shaving my face
With a dull razor blade I should have replaced; It's hell.

... shaking my pillow case.. and shaving my face. :| no. just.. no.

everything right after that was actually really chill. really enjoyed these...

Noose around my neck as I scream that the views nice,
I could die happily now but for you I choose spite!
I'm only an addict if you're the coke; I'm the fiend.
I just hope, it seems, that I can cope in my dreams.

that was really good. and your ending was sick. i like the way you worded it. great statement on therapy in general. but that could've been woven into the rest of your verse. overall a solid read. catchy stuff at times. deep at others. overall a blend between catchy and deep would've been mellowed out with some multies somewhere near the mid-end, if dead set on victory, with this approach.
cake - well. this is not cliche. this was not self appreciating. this was definitely not "fluffy," at all. and i really did enjoy it. just like your take on the topic. although there wasn't really any character to gasps ahold of.. you dropped a beast of a topical. and that is a statement in and of itself.

/v cake - i think he won with directness. although ydk dropped something cool, it was good in a meandering sort of way. cake dropped a concise banger for the /v imo.

12-11-2013, 11:56 PM	#1
patrown ‹^›ô¿ô‹^› Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 596 Battle Record: 13-19 Rep Power: 0	ydk - you had my full attention until shouldn't have to pray for the night I'll be safe; From myself; in bed shaking my pillow case and shaving my face With a dull razor blade I should have replaced; It's hell. ... shaking my pillow case.. and shaving my face. :\| no. just.. no. everything right after that was actually really chill. really enjoyed these... Noose around my neck as I scream that the views nice, I could die happily now but for you I choose spite! I'm only an addict if you're the coke; I'm the fiend. I just hope, it seems, that I can cope in my dreams. that was really good. and your ending was sick. i like the way you worded it. great statement on therapy in general. but that could've been woven into the rest of your verse. overall a solid read. catchy stuff at times. deep at others. overall a blend between catchy and deep would've been mellowed out with some multies somewhere near the mid-end, if dead set on victory, with this approach. cake - well. this is not cliche. this was not self appreciating. this was definitely not "fluffy," at all. and i really did enjoy it. just like your take on the topic. although there wasn't really any character to gasps ahold of.. you dropped a beast of a topical. and that is a statement in and of itself. /v cake - i think he won with directness. although ydk dropped something cool, it was good in a meandering sort of way. cake dropped a concise banger for the /v imo.